The Ocean

[skipboris]

Hmm it works for me...

Try this one
http://www.mediafire.com/?yytmmdrewdn

[Gantry]

s'good.

[skipboris]

Ocean 5 here

http://www.mediafire.com/imageview.php?quickkey=znzymyyneml&thumb=5

[skipboris]

6, 7, 8

[skipboris]

9

[Novelty]

Looks good.

[skipboris]

and 10

[skipboris]

Here is 11 with a watermark.  11 will be the last sheet in the base expansion.  I will next be putting watermarks on all the tiles and applying final touches.  Let me know if I'm missing any tile configurations, or if you would like to see more of something.

[skipboris]

0.4 of the rules

http://www.mediafire.com/?yznuqyctjmd

[Novelty]

Looks good, but it needs a bit of work to tighten up the formatting.  The background box is missing on page 4 and the carc central logo on the last page looks weird.  The font sizes changes within the rules is a bit confusing as well.  Also, you might want to spell things out in full instead of using the abbreviations (CoC, for example should really be the City of Carcassonne).

Also, I don't see the rules for the stand-alone part of this game... will that be separate?

[skipboris]

Looks good, but it needs a bit of work to tighten up the formatting.  The background box is missing on page 4 and the carc central logo on the last page looks weird.  The font sizes changes within the rules is a bit confusing as well.  Also, you might want to spell things out in full instead of using the abbreviations (CoC, for example should really be the City of Carcassonne).

Also, I don't see the rules for the stand-alone part of this game... will that be separate?

Yea I'll definitely clean it up more.  The background box I was really having trouble with but I'll get all this stuff worked out before the final release.  What I'm most interested in is if the rules are clear and solid enough.  As always thanks for the support!

[skipboris]

Here is tile sheet 12, featuring Tower foundations.



And here is version 0.5 of the rules. 

http://www.mediafire.com/?ktcwmeglzmi

It feels pretty close to being done so let me know if anything needs to be tightened up.  Thanks!

[Novelty]

OK, here goes my turn at proofreading.

General: The punctuations are funny.  TM is showing up instead of " for example.

General: "meeple" is a fake word.  The official rules do not use that term.  The word "follower" is used instead (or pig or builder or barn when referring to non-follower meeples).

Page 1:

Comment: Normally we type the title (below the Carc logo and above the a carc expansion by...) with all caps

Preparation does not mention what happens to the normal starting tile if playing with Oceans.  Preparation also does not mention what happens when playing with Rivers.

I have no idea how an ocean can be turned perpendicular to the starting tile as mentioned in drawing of an ocean tile.  Do you mean that the beach cannot be made to turn direction instead?

Page 2:

Comment: It might be nice to move the starter tile graphic to the preparation section and then indicate it in the text with "starter tile (see below)"

Comment: It's a bit confusing to say that oceans are like grassy farms.  It might be less confusing to say that oceans are a new landscape feature.

Comment: I would separate out the farmer/follower analogy when talking about the oceans as a separate section.  That would make it clearer.  The official rules usually have it in two separate sections, i.e place a tile, then followed by place a follower.

Comment: Movement isn't a new mechanic.  Wagons can move, the dragon, count and fairy can move.

Comment: Features may not be played upon (whatever that means) until discovered?  So you can't play onto cities or farms like normal?  Or is this only for features in the ocean?  What about reefs and the ocean and the harbours themselves?

Comment: It would be nice to have a picture of the harbour tile near the sailing section. (Apologies if there is one already there in the example, but the image doesn't appear on the version I downloaded)

Comment: Urgh I'm confused by page 2 alone.  It would be nice to state near the beginning of the deploy a follower stage that followers can be:
a) deployed to the harbour as a sailor.  Two sailors on the same harbour forms a fleet.
b) deployed to the reef as a pirate
etc.
and then logically describe each one of the mechanics for each of the different type of followers.

Comment: Move the wood still not defined.  I use the move verbose "instead of placing a follower" with a footnote that states "or any other actions that may be carried out instead of placing a follower" or something like that.

Comment on 5th line of Sailing: "You may choose to just move 1 tile"  <-- this is confusing.  Why is there a statement talking about moving tiles when it's about moving followers?

Comment on Sailing: It might be better to have a table showing the cost of each move.

Comment: Only 1 colour of follower on an ocean tile?  So a sailor cannot move into an ocean tile where another player has a pirate on a reef?  Or do you mean only 1 colour of follower on the ocean segment of an ocean tile?

Can't comment on the example because the image is not shown on the version I downloaded.

OK, I think I'll stop for now.  However, page 3 and 5 are missing the blue background boxes (just copy and paste those boxes into the correct page).

[Joff]

I can't download from the last link provided, but from version 0.4:

Cover page: 'A fan-made expanion to Carcassonne', needs to be 'expansion'

[skipboris]

Thanks for the feedback guys it will really add some polish!